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zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
I lit a cigarette, and suddenly had the urge to bake something...So...
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Doing her nails and trading beauty secrets with this thing that wanted my friend
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Watching McGuyver. Seeming to draw inspiration from reruns, Pamiga tossed me a cigarette lighter. Now, armed with my trusty can of Pam and a lighter, I asked myself "what would McGuyver do?"
DARKNESS (3 stories) (2022 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
So bam I gave it a good dose of Pam to its featureless face which enraged it more! I looked towards Amiga to find her
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
So I had to resort to scratching out the eyes! Aaack! No eyes? What?
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
At a time like this, a person has to ask herself, WWCND? What would Chuck Norris do? I attempted to roundhouse kick this annoying entity into the sun... But alas... I am not Chuck Norris...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Some how, PAmiga found the strength to toss off the shroud, and cover BOTH entities in one fell swoop!...She laughed as the...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
The first guy pulled the shroud off, and threw it over Amiga Pam!..."Now you are my "Shrouded Vicitim", it growled
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Pam! I decided as I grabbed a random can. If it was a good enough name for butter flavored cooking spray, then it was good enough for my friend! I grabbed Pam and ran back to try to save Pam, just as...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Amiga, yeah!...It means "friend",the entities wouldn't know the difference anyway!
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Abagail, Annabelle, Ashley... This was taking too long! I'll just call her...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
BOOK OF BABY NAMES... Friend was no longer going to remain nameless, as long as I was around!
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
I couldn't stand it any longer! I ran to the kitchen and grabbed the...
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
"Warm bacon dressing" I cried in desperation. "All I had was Catalina!"
But the entity didn't care about my under-stocked kitchen. It was out for one thing, and one thing only...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
"we're the ghosts of spinach salads past... We need to choke you for forgetting the warm bacon dressing!"
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Long fingered gray hand clutching at her throat, choking her! I screamed and tried to pry the fingers away from Nameless' vulnerable neck, only to hear mocking laughter behind me. My blood ran cold as a disembodied voice whispered...
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
PIECE OF SPINACH STUCK IN HER TEETH! 😆...So I told the ghostie guy to hurry and get "friend" a toothpick, or a glass of water to rinse!
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
So I returned to my friend, who had no name to begin with, and shook her awake. "Hey friend!" I cried, "What does it take to wake you up anyway?"
As my friend tried to sit up I noticed she had a...
DARKNESS (3 stories) (2022 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
"GET OUT OF MY HOUSE"! And with that I fled the room leaving my friend who was still sleeping to fend for herself! Halfway up the stairs I realised how inconsiderate I was to my guest, I decided to go back down! 😨 😆
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Once I took care of my dental crises, I looked up just in time to notice the entity was whispering something to my friend in her sleep. I couldn't make out the words, but I could tell it was something important from the way it was behaving, as if it were the last words it would ever speak, and the last chance it had to pass those words on.
BadJuuJuu (guest)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
That I had a massive piece of spinach stick between my teeth!
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
I guess you could say there were no facial features to speak of either. But I could tell it was looking directly at me... I felt it stare me down as if trying to tell me...
510mot (3 stories) (262 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
I don't think I dare spin fiction after some of my comments,zzsgranny! But I promise to keep my B.S. Blanket on safety! Lol
zzsgranny (18 stories) (3327 posts) mod
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Well, since they're not going to read the comments anyway, I say we finish the story for her!...I'll go first:

"Then, the figure turned and (I think she meant) looked at me, it seemed to have no facial expression. No smile, no frown, just a blank stare"

Who's next? 😆
Javelina (4 stories) (3749 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-06)
I know this can't be the author's fault, right? I mean it just can't happen that this somehow got past editing or
zombiesarecommingforme (3 stories) (32 posts)
 
11 years ago (2011-04-06)
D: Please finishD: I hate "cliffhangers". This is a sad day for others whom share my feelings about "cliffhangers"
Pjod (3 stories) (978 posts)
 
11 years ago (2011-04-06)
Is it because folks are afraid of critisizm (?) that they will not agree to read the comments?
I would love to see her come back and finish the story in the comment section. How bout it girl? Another detailed description of this basement being.
Lilady4 (7 stories) (427 posts)
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11 years ago (2011-04-05)
Probably it was no facial features. They won't be reading the comments anyway.
redphx (4 stories) (827 posts)
 
11 years ago (2011-04-05)
Is there something that got cut off here? There has to be more to this story?!
lynrinth (guest)
 
11 years ago (2011-04-05)
What, WHAT?! What else happened?! You can't leave me hanging like this! Did anything else happened after that? Ahhhh, that was great. I wonder just how freaked out you got.

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